From Deep Inside Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

From Deep Inside

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Smile comes from deep inside
If you have dream with full desire outside
It gives some sort of contentment
A means to smile for happy moment

I am not sure for airing open views
But yes certainly it was very much due
As I heard he had proposed for me in open
Among all friends and that too with surprise and sudden

I have made tremendous success
All the essential things with easy access
I keep smiling with light heart
As time has taught me to show it as an art

Not to loose heart with little problems
As my roots were deep in soil and coming out of stem
I could withstand any onslaught caused by nature
I had full commitment towards life for future

Not a day passes off when I am not seized
With the thought of permanent settlement before being ceased
Any girl with good fame may want it to be the top priority
Not to suffer with any kind of the inferiority

I keep all doors and windows open
Let the fresh air make entry and flow in
I get the fancy ideas with cool breeze
To come out in open from the deep freeze

Big smile instead of keeping self in barren desert
That is real beautify of person while taking part in concert
No out side worries enter peaceful mind
Disturb with mantle fabric from where unable come out and find

I laugh it out as matter of no concern
Good days may pass off easily with arrival of bad days in turn
Under such scenario smile helps a lot
I remain unperturbed and quiet

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Smile comes from deep inside If you have dream with full desire outside

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Sophia Sundar its really good... ? it! about a minute ago • Like

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 11 September 2012

Sweet Talker1 day ago nice poem, beautiful rhyming structure. :)

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 11 September 2012

Good JaimieG13 hours ago great emotion Comment +1 Worth a read.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 11 September 2012

d. Jeannie Yates13 hours ago I enjoyed reading this and Im sure the author put a lot of personal feeling and emotion into it. Its worth the time to read it. Comment +1 Good

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 11 September 2012

Garrett Chapman13 hours ago Good, but seems forced.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 11 September 2012

good Gajanan Mishra1 day ago nice Comment +1 Nice Sentiment needs some dynamics in structure

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 11 September 2012

Thomas Franks24 hours ago I think this poem kind of says the same thing in a variety of ways. I think the sentiment. The structure lacks dynamics. I wish he'd broken it up, for example songs have a chorus, ramps and verses and they achieve some dynamics that way by having these different pattered patterns. The soul of it's good, it just needs some structure work. Comment 1 Comment+1 Nicely written

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal

Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India
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