Courtney Kane

Giving My Man His Space - Poem by Courtney Kane

you are quiet today and i do not
ask you the origin of such silence,
black and smoky and devouring
even my own sound now

you are quiet today and the bed is
your castle, the entrance to the bedroom
a moat filled with hungry monsters
like evil men on a mission

you are quiet today and i allow you to be
i will not cross the moat
i will not put my paddles in the water
but if you ask me, my paddles will be
the love sticks they are,
moving me like guppies through your protective moat.

Comments about Giving My Man His Space by Courtney Kane

  • (9/28/2007 5:03:00 PM)

    I REALLY like this poem. It is written from the male point of view no doubt! Space is essential in a relationship and the fact that you've given it to him speaks volumes, it gathers respect at every stanza. Loved it. Ashley xo (Report) Reply

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  • (9/7/2007 5:53:00 PM)

    Let's see giving him about you go to Venus and he goes to Mars. (Report) Reply

  • (9/9/2005 6:32:00 AM)

    Ignore SGK. her criticisms are always on a personal basis and never about the poem- it is an imaginative treatment of this silence. (Report) Reply

  • (8/19/2005 11:25:00 AM)

    I like the way you describe everything in here....very vivid. (Report) Reply

  • (8/8/2005 10:20:00 PM)

    Raynette, perhaps she was referring to spermatozoa little beings of great importance, size approximately 0.05 mm. Agile, clever, competitive, with a one track mind and the aim to get to the finish line.
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  • (8/8/2005 8:29:00 PM)

    Courtney, I like the metaphor of the bed and the moat...but really recoiled at guppies. Somehow that didn't fit the loving way you were giving your husband his space. A guppy is such a lowly life (in my mind's eye, anyway.) I wonder whether you could think of something more elegant swimming around?

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Poem Submitted: Monday, August 8, 2005

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