My life is hollow,
Boring in fact
No passion to follow
As a stone doesn't act
Thrown, kicked
Moved by fate
I never initiate I just wait
I dream to be, I aim to see
I live to do, I think of you
Willing to change
Willing to start
To feel alive with you my life
To fill what is hollow
As a feeling I will never swallow
then I took it wrong.. pardon me. But I told you [through a personal message] what I think of your poem - and I repeat it shortly: I like it :)
My life is hollow, Boring in fact No passion to follow. begin to write love poetry. about romance and romance and passion. thank you. tony
This hole is filled by your great feeling. We all need to feel this hole to have another change in our life. Thank you.
A nice portrayal of loneliness and how the poet sees it, empty and void depicted well. A meaningless and empty life shorn of emotion, purpose and direction Good working rhymes... However the last lines appear a bit abrupt....although it adds a dimension of volition or determination...it does not append to the direction or flow of the poem…just a suggestion…my humble opinion! Nice Liked.. :)
I am very pleased to have read this beautiful poem of yours and the comment that followed. As poets, whatever we write are not necessarily autobiographical. We can certainly write in the first person expressing the experiences or feelings of others. Whoever may have been represented in the poem, his or her hollowness of life has been well depicted. The short note at the end may not tell a story, but it certainly corroborates what has been said in the poem- hollowness of life.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
a hollow life..? ? no kidding.. you're a poet and poets have no hollow lives, dear Asma..