We put our heads together
(hide behind our hair)
only kisses & promises
happen in here.
We put our heads together
(disappear behind our hair)
the world reduced to a single heartbeat
only love happens here.
We put our heads together
(the world disappears)
Time seems to pass us by
...who cares?
Sketchily potent. Loads of space for the reader to interpose their own equivalents, and yet it's not so loose that we get lost. Interesting, imaginative and it works. Good writing!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Jim has picked the perfect word for what I have read so far - - potent, but so very sketchily done...I am amazed to see how few words it takes to describe such powerful emotions...only love happens here! Outstanding writing.