Its My Fault Poem by Angel Jimenez

Its My Fault

Rating: 2.5


I was like in heaven, everything was so perfect, until the day i made a STUPID mistake.Every moment was so perfect, until the day I made that STUPID mistake. And I still making mistakes. Life is not the one to blame. Why am I making the same stupid mistakes? I hurted an innocent angel, I cant live thinking about that. Im being a coward, by blamig life. Its my mistake, I command my life, Its my fault. I wish i could receive another chance, but it seems I dont diserve it. Im forgived, but that does not cure the pain in my heart. The bullet is still there, and I hope one day it can come out. I cant sleep, thinking about my mistake, I wont repeat it, I swear wont repeat the same mistake. It hurts, buts that my lesson. I need to stand up, and keep on walking

Sunday, January 11, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: angel,heaven,hope,life,pain,sleep
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ana Zaldivar 12 January 2009

you have to be more creative... don't use the same words the other poet does.... and you know what i mean... improve your grammar... try to separate the sentences by making four-lined paragraphs.. and i know you'll make the same mistake you made.. 'cause it's not the first time you've done it.... i'll give you a five...4 points for expressing your feelings and 1 for trying. you have to keep on writting, trying.. to make it to the 10 points

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Cory Jensen 11 January 2009

I just noticed that the word 'hurted' isn't suppose to be like that. its should be 'I've hurt' not hurted. I thought I would just let you know! :) ♥

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