Japanese Communal Bath-House Lectures Poem by Paul Warren

Japanese Communal Bath-House Lectures



The Japanese have a communal bathing tradition
They gather in a bath house of their own volition
But this practice was falling out of favour
And people wanted to try this and savour
The communal fellowship of this practice
Was for them something that was attractive

Apart from being naked and clean
You can attend a lecture on an interesting theme
But would you attend one of these naked
With your nakedness to others a prerequisite.

© Paul Warren Poetry

Monday, May 29, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: world
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jefferson Carter 29 May 2017

Paul, this might work better if you lose the rhyme strait-jacket. The subject matter is fascinating; the handling of it is forced and awkward (You can attend a lecture AS IT Can BE SEEN) . Free verse time? If you'd like, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Let me know how you like it. Yrs, JC

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