Lamentations Iv Comments

good lamentation...trapped in freedom of love! but this freedom in fact is captivity only...good piece 10

This is an interesting poem. To be or not to be free (trapped am I....) , to feel atrophied through someone else's eyes... well, the way you deal with the subject -quite classical- raises the duality and the depth of the question, which is rather complex. I liked the way you played with rhythm and lines. It adds to the complexity and confusion of the feelings...(for example in freedom/ trapped; the absence of any question mark at the end of Trapped am I...) and creates an atmosphere where questionings of the mind join their expression into breathing, like a lack of air. 10!

Very expressive. Lovely. Thank you.

lovely piece...thoughts provoking. a 10.