Lost Poem by Estrella Brummels

Lost

Rating: 5.0


Looking around,
It's so dark,
I'm lost.

I sit down,
Hoping to be found.
But I never have such good luck.

I hear strange sounds.
They're coming from the trees...
The sounds are weird...
And scary.

I see things I'm not supposed to see,
I see things no one else can.

They're always watching me,
Waiting for the next mistake.

That's not gonna happen!

I stand up and walk forward,
Head held high,
Me standing tall,
Till I come across another wall,
That I have to climb over...

I will never be lost again!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
John Knight 12 December 2009

Hi Ella - I am honoured to be the first to comment on this very emotive poem - it's beautiful! For structure and content I open the score wit a MAX - TEN. Verses One to Five really scared me coming from someone with their whole life before them. Lost - in despair - hallucinating - hearing voices - seeing spectres - accusers - WOW what a desparate scenario. Then the lovely turning point (V 6) THAT'S NOT GONNA HAPPEN.! - AWESOME! I love the resolve and 'Power of Positive Thinking' in V 7 'Stand - Walk - head held high' Hey Ella - when you come to the next wall in life - you will jump over it! Thanks for the last line 'I will never be lost again! ' We are all with you. Love you in poetry - JOHN

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Rafique Farooqi 12 December 2009

An obsessive picture given with great skill of psychology....a true image of certain situation is penned down....well done

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