Brooklyn Sorrow

Rookie (April 21,1994 / Paris)

My Immortal - Poem by Brooklyn Sorrow

You've died.
You're gone.
But you're here for ever.
Eternally mine.

I know you've left me.
My pain is great.
My loss is powerful.
My heart is fragile.

I can't get around the truth.
So I believe the lie.
Can't take this.
I want to die.

My immortal.
Yes that's what you are.

My immortal.
Watching me from afar.

My immortal.
Forever divine.
Forever here.
Eternally mine.


Comments about My Immortal by Brooklyn Sorrow

  • (11/29/2009 3:59:00 AM)


    There is no need to want to die....
    There are ppl worst off than you some blind,
    some are insane and other stuff
    not all of us are luck...keep living
    keep writing poems....good job
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  • John Knight (11/29/2009 3:46:00 AM)


    Hi Brooke - This is another elegantly structured and phrased FREE VERSE MODERN POEM - the flow is so so smooth and the ending negates the angst at the begining - perfect. Because it is an excellent poem - in its genre - I score it a MAX (TEN) . You have a genuine poet's heart and poet's mind and what you share with us is pure poetry. Synopsis: V 1 Faces the fact of death counteracted by your faith in IMMORTALLITY. V 2&3 Describe poignantly the pain of loss: 'My loss is powerful - My heart is fragile - I want to die'. V 4 Changes the mood completely and introduces the joy of the presence of the IMMORTAL. 'My immortal for ever divine - forever here - eternally mine'. We need to have the assurance (which I am sure you have Brooke) that our loved ones are with the Angels and like the Angels their 'presence' is with us to comfort and strengthen us. Our deep Sorrow is turned to pure Joy by their 'presence. Lovely poem by a lovely young poet. Love you in Poetry - JOHN. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, November 28, 2009



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