Its noon, its noon
Sitting outside, a gentle breeze
Followed with a touching smell
Continues on and on
A sound of cooking
Smell of dishes in the air
Can they bring a good noon
Someone watching
others in work
Alone in outdoor
really I am enjoying
Leaves twitter
dancing up and down
A sense of greenery
Make my eyes happy
Its raining here sweating heat in the noon
Makes the people a little drained
Who is the one that comes to eat
That good old homely noon
Noon in effortless words and a good feeling it induce... Well described and a good write..
i llike it. good job on making ur senses come to life in this poem good job.
Nice, I thought this very good but was left a little wantting at the end. Some very nice imagies and good choice of words too. I think this could be longer with othervignettes of noon. Nice work.
it is half way therel, the images you use are really human and touching but your poem lacks some poetic impact. Think about trying to give it a rythem or some half rhyme just to give it a poetic feel. There is a lot you could do with this poem because it is a very relatable image but just work on building a poem round your words. xx keep up the good start xx
some fine imagery used which completes the picture that you are trying to fuse with your poetic words nice one
in your place you probably describe at noon time regularly...I am hungry.. my stomach need to be fed...it's natural...is that the point you want?
I thought some words could have been added or deleted. 'cooker'? ? But overall, it was inviting to come to that persons house or neighborhood around noon. Also a picture story was behind it.
Perhaps you meant 'cooking, ' rather than 'cooker? ' 'sweating' heat, rather than 'swearing heat? ' - although that might be an interesting usage. And, I'm guessing, 'drained, ' rather than 'drain? ' Keep at it, Rohan. A good suggestion I have heard: read lots of poetry, classical and modern. See how the masters get that blend of image, metaphor, symbol, and make a blend as tasty as that lunch you describe. Best wishes!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You have created a beautiful picture of the noon time. Your writing is simple and touching.