Nika McGuin

Silver Star - 3,125 Points (12/01/89 - present / Louisiana)

Obviously Oblivious - Poem by Nika McGuin

I used to say
'I wish we could always,
get along this way'
but now, all too clearly
I can see you moving away
like tail-lights in the distance
red to pink, growing still fainter
as I stand alone on this cold sidewalk
watching our sunset fade away

And I give up
defending you, needlessly protecting you,
& and clinging to you as if you're all I have
it's clear you have so many others
& it's clear you've never
cherished me in that way
I've never, been precious to you

Hard of hearing & quick to wander off
I turn my back for a second
to find you've disappeared again
you make it so obvious
you'd rather be anywhere but here

With your headphones on
& your baggy gray shirt
I watch you trail away, into the mist
with that stupid grin on your face
oblivious & uncaring


Comments about Obviously Oblivious by Nika McGuin

  • Bri Edwards (6/23/2015 10:04:00 PM)


    there is an & clinging to and. :)

    favorite lines of mine; or should i say yours:

    I can see you moving away
    like tail-lights in the distance
    red to pink, growing still fainter

    if this guy is/was a real guy in your life, it sounds like you are lucky to lose him. a well-put-together 'story'. a druggie, or just stupid and oblivous? ?

    enjoyed. bri :)
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  • Daniel Brick (4/14/2015 11:19:00 PM)


    WOW It's painful to have to confront so many bitter realizations in just about 12 lines - but what is necessary is almost always painful. Pleasant things don't stay undone long enough to get labeled - it's the tough love, the farewells, the departures that preoccupy us as you shoe in your poem. Even in the last passage you're still following after with hope and a gift of attention. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, March 18, 2015



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