M.J. Lemon


Paradise Dies - Poem by M.J. Lemon

The tragedy lies
in knowing the future lives
only in the mind
the body surrenders well
before one's paradise dies

Topic(s) of this poem: destination, destiny, fate, fulfilment, future, realization

Form: Tanka


Comments about Paradise Dies by M.J. Lemon

  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (10/28/2017 6:28:00 PM)

    The best Tanka ever written! Smooth, flowing from line to line like a waterfall from one ledge to another. Not one- I repeat, not one- -excess word. And while it is a highly logical and wise poem, it is full of anguish for our human condition and its temporary quality. I know I say this often about your work- -but truly this may be the best poem I have ever read of yours.... I say that knowing deep inside that your next poem will capture me and the next one after that... your fault though cuz you have a knack for writing magnificent poetry, my friend. 10 ++++++++++++ and another placement on my fav list [I'm beginning to think I should just tell PH to put all M.J.'s poetry on my fav list the moment it is posted] Extraordinary depth and emotion here. (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(10/28/2017 11:37:00 PM)

    Wow! Susan, thank you so very much for this amazing comment. I really enjoyed your most recent work, and am looking forward to your next. I'll be back to your page in a few days. Thanks again...And, by the way, I am told the work I am editing now is 'rather dark.'

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  • Valsa GeorgeValsa George (9/27/2017 12:07:00 AM)

    One dies when his aspirations and dreams are never realized even before his actual death! This painful reality we observe in others' life and confront in our own every day existence! Terse and deep write, dear friend! (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(9/27/2017 1:30:00 AM)

    Thank you so much, Valsa. Yes, that is the tragedy.

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  • Moira CameronMoira Cameron (9/11/2017 7:01:00 PM)

    This calls to mind Poe's phrase: is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream. I always found that rather sad, because I used to think of myself as full of optimism and dreams for the future. But these days, the idea of dreams within dreams and thoughts of the future only being in the mind has more sustenance in this world of uncertainty. (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(9/15/2017 2:55:00 PM)

    Thank you so much, Moira. Yes, there is something to be said for dreams and certainty. How easy it is to dream when there is order in the world.

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  • Richard Wlodarski (7/28/2017 3:01:00 AM)

    The mind can make a paradise of Earth or a hell of The Afterlife. M.J., you've written another winner! (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(7/28/2017 10:28:00 PM)

    Absolutely, Richard. Yes it can. I hope there is choice involved when the brain makes a decision for paradise or for hell. The absence of choice....how ugly it would be to find oneself caught in a realm where another outcome is not even a possibility.

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  • Akham Nilabirdhwaja SinghAkham Nilabirdhwaja Singh (6/16/2017 10:13:00 AM)

    Paradise is often illusory.The poem is a tale of life itself. (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/16/2017 11:41:00 PM)

    Your observation about the nature of paradise, - so true. Thank you for reading, Akham.

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  • Simone Inez Harriman (6/13/2017 2:51:00 AM)

    Our future can only reside in our minds as often we have no idea what tomorrow can bring. The body does surrender to ones fate before our ambitions and aspirations are fulfilled which inevitably will end our personal paradise. A poem that gives a multitude of thought.10+ (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/14/2017 1:05:00 AM)

    Thank you so much, Simone. Yes, the body always gives up before the hope, the spirit, the desire seemingly align themselves with the inevitable. You reminded me of a great line in an old classic French film (Cesar, I think) , in which one of the characters claims he isn't afraid of death, but he is afraid of not being alive to see the good things tomorrow will bring....Thanks again, Simone.

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  • Muhammad Ali (6/9/2017 8:19:00 AM)

    life is weird, because of hopes, emotions, dreams. because of bonds and relations. beautiful lines. pain of death is must to be repeated in life while breathing (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/9/2017 1:40:00 PM)

    Very well said, Muhammad. There is a kind of death when those emotions and relationships are not realized in a material sense. There is a kind of death when one realizes the body may have ambitions, but the emotions and feelings will not comply...you've made a profound observation. Thanks so much for reading.

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  • Unwritten SoulUnwritten Soul (6/4/2017 3:49:00 AM)

    Or maybe just lost in paradise...: p (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/4/2017 1:49:00 PM)

    That hint of Milton! Thanks, Soul.

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  • Laurie Van Der HartLaurie Van Der Hart (6/4/2017 1:11:00 AM)

    A tragedy indeed. Well written, M.J. And yet, I believe this will soon be rectified. Paradise lives! (Report)Reply

    Mj Lemon(6/4/2017 1:51:00 PM)

    Therein the cosmic balance! Thanks, Laurie.

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, June 4, 2017



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