Alice Vedral Rivera

Rookie - 356 Points (Chicago, Illinois, USA)

! Poets' Sinkhole Of Sewage (Social Commentary) - Poem by Alice Vedral Rivera

Excrement of
Arrogant, haughty
Contaminated
Minds filled with filthy
Supercilious
Vile insolence

Shameful, provisional
Sub-identities
Skulk in camouflaged
Hideous ‘victimology'
Seeking sympathy for
Self-inflicted attacks

Deleterious
Negativity
Misconstrued
Supposed victory
Smug, self-important
License of deceit

Poetic license
Is not indulgence
In denigration

In insensitivity
We lose our liberty
And our own humanity

Topic(s) of this poem: commentary


Poet's Notes about The Poem

This poem was inspired by the Poemhunter Forum and originally posted by me on PH in 2007 © Alice Vedral Rivera - 2007

Comments about ! Poets' Sinkhole Of Sewage (Social Commentary) by Alice Vedral Rivera

  • (6/18/2017 7:23:00 AM)

    Well penned and poigant (Report)Reply

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  • John S (3/23/2015 11:55:00 PM)

    I disagree somewhat. I've written only one poem (I plan to start writing more) and it delves into the severe depression and brain fog I've dealt with most of my life, and my dissatisfaction with most of the drab, lifeless jobs I've had at corporate chains. I was being completely honest, I wasn't looking for sympathy. Nobody on here actually know who I am so what good does sympathy in a comment do for me? I asked for constructive criticism, and I got a bunch of sympathy and people advertising their own poems (my pet peeve) , but I would rather have had criticism on the craft on poem-writing and how well my poem flowed etc. Don't be so quick to judge. The one rule about poetry is that there are no rules. (Report)Reply

    Alice Vedral Rivera(3/24/2015 6:39:00 AM)

    John, I wrote this poem about the nastiness and feuding on the Poemhunter forum in 2007, not about comments on individual poems. Poemhunter has recently disabled/removed the forum. The pleas by poets to read their poems started to appear as PH expanded and it is an effort to not get lost in the plethora of poets/poems. The pleas bother me as well but I can understand why. However, I don't read the poems of poets desperate to be read. Thank you for taking the time to read my poems and for your comments. It is much appreciated.

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  • Bill Cantrell (10/7/2014 3:28:00 PM)

    I just love your words here, I have felt this way but as an amateur poet, I could never saddle such words and ride them so well! Bravo! (Report)Reply

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  • (10/13/2007 6:00:00 PM)

    Bravo, Alice! This is one of your finest, and most scathing poems ever. You have backbone beyond compare, my friend. Good for you! ! ! ! Wonderful piece. (Report)Reply

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  • (10/13/2007 12:13:00 PM)

    what? ? ? ...................................................................... (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, October 13, 2007

Poem Edited: Wednesday, October 1, 2014


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