Proudness Poem by Lawrence S. Pertillar

Proudness



How proud of themselves can someone actually be?
If someone else is observed displaying,
A courage with strength and identity.

I would think someone with integrity,
Would be already proud.
And would not allow themselves to question,
A proudness shown...
That seem to be suppressed.
And held inside of them to be in doubt!

Unless more of them are seen walking about?
And this encourages a proudness pronounced...
From them to be strutted with smiles on their mouths.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Lawrence S. Pertillar 14 November 2008

Thank you, Herbert. I agree. This poem 'reeks' of arrogance. That is the intention. I'm not one necessarily of 'Proudness'. However...I can carry a 'tinge' of pulchritude for the fun of it!

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Herbert Nehrlich1 14 November 2008

This does not work for me at all. It is awkward and is not saved by content. The term proudness presupposes arrogance, something that you may not have intended to convey. H

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