Senryu Series Ii: Winter Blues Poem by Lillian Susan Thomas

Senryu Series Ii: Winter Blues

Rating: 5.0


I lean my warm cheek
to cold, empty pail. Tears break
silence as they spill.

My tears turn to ice;
the well echoes with tiny clinks:
but silent falls new snow.

Down dry, wintry well
I dropp my bucket. Thud! Splash!
Not empty: frozen.

Clicking on window panes,
sleet wakes me from dreams of snow
and you driving home.

Saturday, April 11, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: snow,tears
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
fleur de lys 11 December 2009

An instant favorite, vivid and moving. I love the perfect choice of words and the atmosphere so effectively conveyed throughout.

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Ashraful Musaddeq 05 June 2009

Enchanting composition,10+

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Jack Price 30 April 2009

Great job on this poem and you taught me something about adding more than one poem in a grouping. thanks for the read!

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Jim Valero 22 April 2009

Beautiful jewel of a poem! Artfully constructed-the parallel stanzas (each one a sharp haiku image) work like a sparklling mirror of the speaker's feelings and the way Nature herself is felt to respond to her human needs. The work on contrasts-warmth against cold, silence against sound, emptiness against presence-is excellent. The last haiku-stanza is superbly suggestive of how uncertain 'reality' is so many times. As John keats writes at the end of 'Ode to a Nightingale'-'Do I wake or sleep? ' Thank you for the gift!

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