Anita Sharma


Sunshine - Poem by Anita Sharma

It's amazing
How a beautiful sunshine
Makes everything seem like it belongs.

Topic(s) of this poem: nature

Form: Free Verse


Poet's Notes about The Poem

sunshine is life

Comments about Sunshine by Anita Sharma

  • Fabrizio Frosini (9/17/2015 12:06:00 PM)


    sunshine's life, but - sorry to say - your write is not a haiku, Anita..

    it hasn't got the features of the 'classic' Japanese form, neither that of a 'modern' (Japanese or not) haiku:

    - - the basic structure (no more than 5-7-5 'on') is not present here: your last line is too long..

    - - a kigo is missed (but it's not the real point ***)

    - - and it doesn't answer the 1st request to be called 'haiku': a contraposition between 2 images of the world/nature/environment, with a 'oh! ' - a subtle wonder, before the beauty/mystery of nature - with a kireji to separate the two different 'ideas' / images.. (a simple dash, ''-'', can be used as a kireji)

    (*** also a tiny minority of Japanese classical haiku don't express a kigo)

    Cheers
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    Anita Sharma Anita Sharma (9/21/2015 6:54:00 PM)

    yes sir i got your point..than you so much you took time to give me feedback..i have lot to learn from experience people like you and others. many thanks, ..your feedback is much valuable and welcomed..

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, September 17, 2015

Poem Edited: Sunday, May 1, 2016


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