Through golden leaves, through arms that twist,
Through crooked fingers spectrums split,
To reveal the scars of an ancient tryst
Softly veiled in morning mist.
short and sharp but very meaningful......sometimes an ancient things could reveal some hidden explanation.......through deeper exploration we'll know what you mean't. well piece pink floyd.
the brevity of this 1 I definately prefer to more long winded nature poems, some powerful imagery too, good work.
i say this alot, but each time i say it, i mean it. you have a true talent. amazing job
it is short but it says all it needs to say. it is similar to a poem i have not yet had a chance to post to the site. when i do i'd like to let you know so i can get your impressions on it. floyd, it seems some of our writing is similar. your piece by pice is a bit similar to my poem My loves Light. my poem is longer than yours though. not a bad thing, i just had more to say Jen
You have written a language that escapes the use of plain everyday language, thus expressing yourself figuratively, not literally so therefore you have written poetry. It is wonderful, keep it up.
poetry is an expression, are you saying we have rules on how to express ourselves? think about it. good work zimmer, i don't care what they say.
i'm sorry but i disagree, i don't think poetry or art have any rules. it is a form of expression and people are free to express themselves however they want. it is precisely this freedom that makes it so great, anybody can do it.
Of course poetry has rules - to deny this is to deny poetry as an art form - it's just that the rules vary, and can be adjusted to one's purpose. The meter doesn't bother me, but, for me, as this has only 4 lines, and 3 of them rhyme, it is a shame that the other one doesn't.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Very lovely poem (they require a few more characters)