What is that you're seeing
in the corner of your eye
Stealthful foot steps following
never passing by
In the corner of the mirror
watching when you blink
It is patient and silent
and deadlier than you think
It's biding time for years
until the time is ripe
Until you've grown enough
and are just the right type
When you have grown enough
to be a tasty morsel
From beneath the bed it comes
through a secret portal
In silence it is waiting
needing to be fed
Out in darkness slithering
from beneath your bed
In your sleep it comes
needing to be fed
Nibbling a tasty morsel
until you are dead
Darla, at first i didn't think stealthful was a 'proper' word. but i found it online and, on the same page, did NOT find stealthy'; i DID think THAT (stealthy) was the 'proper' adjective. Eventually i DID find stealthy, so we are both 'good'! ! ! for some reason i laughed after reading and deadlier than you think. NO, I'M NOT WEIRD! ! ! ok. well, ========================================================== maybe a little bit. BIDING, not bidding, young authoress! bide bīd/ verb archaic dialect gerund or present participle: biding remain or stay somewhere. how long must I bide here to wait for the answer? in general [i think], in such a situation, if double consonants come between two vowels, the first vowel has a 'short' sound, not a 'long' sound. i'm guessing the second vowel does also. sitting, winning, falling, ............... and i think, in general, with one consonant between two vowels, the first vowel has a 'long' vowel sound. biting, writing. smoking, etc. - - - - - - - - - - - - - When you have grown enough to be a tasty morsel ................ a much bigger laugh here! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Darlene, if it's raining there today, , like here, ...................... try my ('6 Foot 3'......[LONG; Scary; Gross; Murder] or (Alien's Oyster-Feast........ [Fantasy; Humor? ; Alien Invasion? ; Personal] ======================= these lines made me laugh AND kind of 'SHIVER'! ! ! Out in darkness slithering from beneath your bed ........AND i do NOT mind snakes! try my: Mary's Pet....[Humor; Human nature; Pets; Scary? ; Grade school] WOW! these lines did NOT make me laugh, BUT i got a huge SMILE on my face! and another bit of a shiver! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! a slither-shiver? ? to MyPoemList. and i think i'll send at least to John Westlake. i'm loving it! no wonder you got Bob............to protect you! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! or do you protect HIM? ? bri :)
I once wrote a poem quite similar to this one a long time ago! Yours was better though, nice job and I enjoyed the ending! ! !
Darla, you wording effectively sets the stage for events that border on the macabre. The element of suspense is evident throughout the writing and is noteworthy. A great play of words to most effectively draw the reader in. Super job!
In your sleep it comes needing to be fed Nibbling a tasty morsel until you are dead....finely penned
In your sleep it comes needing to be fed Nibbling a tasty morsel until you are dead.....good thought
Funny.. a very similar poem was presented on Dr Who before you wrote this. 🤔
Take a look at The Poet's notes about The Poem: Inspired by a poem recited by Doctor Who Season Eight Episode 4 of the revival:
Darla, please send me a response to Adam Nason's comment from 2016. i had wanted to use this poem in March 2017 showcase, but would not feel right doing it if his words are true! bri :) i hope you are well.
This is a rework of an existing masterpiece. Whats that in the mirror? In the corner of your eye? Whats that footstep following? But never passing by? Perhaps the lot is waiting, Perhaps when we're all dead. Out they'll come a slithering, From underneath your bed.
ooooooo spoooky nightmare poem...good rhyme...