The Power Of Friendship Comments

It was a nice effort and I think you could have potential in writing. Like Ernestine said try shortening the lines a bit. The subject is good, but you did overload the senses a bit with it.

The actual poem is very nice Jason, although I think perhaps the lines are a little too long, more like a conversation than getting the point across which needs to be using one word instead of two or three words. Because the lines are long and conversational it's quite a lot to take in when reading it. Shorten and I think you will give the same meaning without the poem being too overloaded. This isn't criticizing only giving you ideas to play with. I like the subject, if was just a bit beefy. Love Ernestine XXX

Sorry, me again. Read my poem 'A Friend Is' and tell me what you think. You can critique a poem, it will teach you something about poetry. Best H

Jason I suggest you do two things: A) read as many different poems as you can find B) Practice. If it is easier for you to practice rhyming lines do it, compose birthday poems etc. The poet Jason Anderson (not Jedediah Henderson) wrote poems for his family and read them when they had their tea...... Best wishes H

Perhaps you are truly new to the art of poetry. Yet, this was a nice effort and I believe you will grow into a diverse ability. Just keep expressing yourself. And ignore those who are quick to judge without disclosing themselves and offering a word of encouragement. Certainly focus on continued development. Thank you for sharing your thoughtful piece.