The Present Burns Poem by Ellie Sutton

The Present Burns

Rating: 5.0


I'd like to give a little explanation before submitting this poem.
For the 18 months I've been battling with anorexia. I wrote the first verse whilst in the thick of it, and the second 6 months later, beginning to come out of the other end.
I'd appriciate feedback :)


Holding back, yet grasping out,
Clinging to the furnace whilst reaching for the sun.
The present burns.
Exit, please?
It's barred, it's chained by fear mislead.
There is no exit, mere shadows ahead.
I'll stay, I'll burn.
Clinging to the furnace, reaching for the sun,
Aspiring for nothing, though my future's begun.

Glancing back, yet straining out,
Cautious of the embers, yet willing for the sun.
The present burns.
Strength, please?
To break my shackles towards desires ahead
And banish forever a fear mislead.
Fights sweeter than flight.
Cautious of the embers but willing for the sun,
Aspiring for freedom to face life head on.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Walterrean Salley 26 December 2009

Hi Ellie. I hope you're continuing your struggle. Your poem is a desperate plea to be free. The power lies within the individual will (which shines throughout your poem) . With faith, a strong will, and the help of God, I know that you can beat the odds. Please continue the fight, and I will be praying for you. Thanks for sharing your heart. Take care. 10 (in case the system doesn't register my vote)

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Ella Marsland 26 November 2008

elo u proble dont no me but im in year 10 at wyrley, , i think ur poems amazin, , and i can relate to every word i suffer from anorexia and have been for the last 10 months 2bh i wish i was at the point were i feel better but to me it seems like the beggining i think ur so brave u can gt through it ur not alone and keep goin with the poems there brilliant, tried doing poems myself but there nothin like these. ella xx

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Tom Balch 01 September 2008

Ellie this is a wonderful, powerful piece, the pain is there for all to see, I dont know why Yoonoos never marks, its a 10 + from me regards Tom

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