shilpi saxena

The Promise - Poem by shilpi saxena

When I was a little wench,
I thought the world is all fair.
Everybody is ready to help others,
No sadness, no tear.

When I became some old,
I feel something wrong.
Everyone is busy in themselves,
They only sing a selfish song.

Now I am living in my present age,
The ancient thoughts were arising.
But suddenly I found a shining star*
That is u, who are so inspiring.

Thou alters my views,
You show me the reality.
Now I believe there is someone,
Who ever takes care of me.

O! u are my peculiar friend,
Came into my life as a miracle.
Just like me you were also alone,
But now we are Friends Forever.

We will surely touch the welkin,
If we neglect the trifling things.
I Promise ever truthful to u and
Promise me to do the same everlasting.

Comments about The Promise by shilpi saxena

  • Jazib Kamalvi (1/28/2018 9:58:00 AM)

    A good start with a nice poem, Shilpi. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you. (Report) Reply

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  • V P Mahur (3/1/2014 3:20:00 PM)

    Dear Shilpi
    this is a very nice combination of the gradual learning process in the world
    it is a mixture of good and bad.
    Thanks for sweet composition.
    I invite you to read my poems and comment.
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  • Suman Kumar Das (11/28/2013 9:04:00 AM)

    Superb! loving lines............keep it up. (Report) Reply

  • (3/19/2013 5:57:00 AM)

    waww! What a passionate, emotional and loving poem, u get it good keep it up. (Report) Reply

  • VEER the ultimate boy (1/18/2013 5:27:00 AM)

    hey dear where r u now a days....why dont u wrote some more interesting poems...

    love the poem very much
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  • Ramesh Rai (2/27/2012 2:30:00 AM)

    this world is still fair as you see. a nice poem (Report) Reply

  • (8/30/2011 7:33:00 PM)

    That is a true account of friendship portrayed very well. The poem was well meaning and reminded of my own best friend. Beautiful indeed... Why don't you write more? One poem doesn't suit your caliber :) (Report) Reply

  • Allemagne Roßmann (8/30/2011 1:00:00 PM)

    u r seemingly promising poetess.....explore ur poetic skills and entertain the readers more like us...poignant write...well done (Report) Reply

  • (8/30/2011 6:25:00 AM)

    Very elegant..,
    luved it....8-)
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  • Swagat Bhattacharjee (7/16/2011 8:58:00 AM)

    well two words came striking when i read this work of yours.. Elegance and Innocence.. :) .. Keep improving.. You definitely have something within.. :) (Report) Reply

  • (7/8/2011 7:14:00 AM)

    So you wish to become am English lit. Prof.? I really don't get any pleasure telling you that first you better concentrate on syntax and grammar, very much I'm afraid.
    In your poem-just to point out a single item-you changed tenses twice in the first 2 lines. You have to learn consistency in that regard: it is quite important.
    Also, simply by meaning well does not a good poem make. Read, read, read, the greatest poets before beginning to write. I spent many years in the library reading hundreds of anthologies and individual compilations before I thought I could even begin without avoiding pretension.
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  • Romeo Della Valle (7/5/2011 8:28:00 PM)

    I am highly impressed by this excellent and well penned write which clearly reveals the very essence of FRIENDSHIP and LOVE! I honestly hope that this is your stepping stone towards your future in the Poetry World! You got what it takes to make it happen: TALENT! Go for it my friend! You are not alone. We are behind you to guide you! Keep inspiring the World, it is worthy! 10+++ Love and Peace for always! .. (Report) Reply

  • Dr.subhendu Kar (7/3/2011 12:41:00 PM)

    quite passionate write, yet ingeniously carved over rune of hope, keep on writing... (Report) Reply

  • Thomas Kollamparambil (6/25/2011 11:26:00 AM)

    have u written only one poem? I am sure that youy have ample caliber to reach the extreme.Try to go ahead stpo not till the goal is reached. (Report) Reply

  • (6/21/2011 12:11:00 PM)

    thanks for depicting the selfish song of modern people......i'm longing for a friend like u hu knows the tender purposes of humanlife, , , , , will u b my frnd? (Report) Reply

  • (6/17/2011 4:43:00 AM)

    good one....really one of the very good poem i have read on PH
    : -)
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  • VEER the ultimate boy (6/5/2011 5:32:00 AM)

    hey my sweet friend
    this poem is as sweet as u.....and am so happy this came from ur heart n abt
    freindship which is the best bond in this earth..

    keep it up sweetu..
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, May 24, 2011

Poem Edited: Tuesday, November 19, 2013

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