The Promise Poem by shilpi saxena

The Promise

Rating: 4.8

When I was a little wench,
I thought the world is all fair.
Everybody is ready to help others,
No sadness, no tear.

When I became some old,
I feel something wrong.
Everyone is busy in themselves,
They only sing a selfish song.

Now I am living in my present age,
The ancient thoughts were arising.
But suddenly I found a shining star*
That is u, who are so inspiring.

Thou alters my views,
You show me the reality.
Now I believe there is someone,
Who ever takes care of me.

O! u are my peculiar friend,
Came into my life as a miracle.
Just like me you were also alone,
But now we are Friends Forever.

We will surely touch the welkin,
If we neglect the trifling things.
I Promise ever truthful to u and
Promise me to do the same everlasting.

Ramesh Rai 27 February 2012

this world is still fair as you see. a nice poem

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Anshul Gupta 30 August 2011

That is a true account of friendship portrayed very well. The poem was well meaning and reminded of my own best friend. Beautiful indeed... Why don't you write more? One poem doesn't suit your caliber :)

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Allemagne Roßmann 30 August 2011

u r seemingly promising poetess.....explore ur poetic skills and entertain the readers more like us...poignant write...well done

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Raj Jadhav 30 August 2011

Very elegant.., luved it....8-)

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Swagat Bhattacharjee 16 July 2011

well two words came striking when i read this work of yours.. Elegance and Innocence.. :) .. Keep improving.. You definitely have something within.. :)

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Jazib Kamalvi 28 January 2018

A good start with a nice poem, Shilpi. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you.

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V P Mahur 01 March 2014

Dear Shilpi this is a very nice combination of the gradual learning process in the world it is a mixture of good and bad. Thanks for sweet composition. I invite you to read my poems and comment.

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Suman Kumar Das 28 November 2013

Superb! loving lines............keep it up.

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Ogbonna Solomon 19 March 2013

waww! What a passionate, emotional and loving poem, u get it good keep it up.

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VEER the ultimate boy 18 January 2013

hey dear where r u now a days....why dont u wrote some more interesting poems... love the poem very much

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