Thoughts Poem by tiyler durden

Thoughts

Rating: 4.8


from a sea of dreams
reality crashes through.
Through the whispering leaves
Autumn makes things new

From a road through the mind
Reality is the destination
in the back of my mind
I jump to it without hesitation

Like a wish that is blessed
yet ends up a disaster
I feel I am pressed
upon an unlucky star

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
***** ********* 05 January 2006

tiyler durden, what a lovely dreamy feel, your poem has. I didn't think you had it in you, to be honest! lol I was a little unsure of the two minds in the 2nd stanza, they kind of holted the smooth flow a little. Thoroughly enjoyable, all the same. 9 from Tai, pickie today.

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Mary Nagy 05 January 2006

Very nice Tiyler.........interesting thoughts. I hope your luck changes for you! sincerely, Mary

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David Darbyshire 05 January 2006

Nice thought Tlyer dave

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