Rating: 5.0

Poor toad.
You carry such
a load of ugliness.
A gash for a mouth,
big bulging eyes,
a fat, round body.
It doesn't surprise
when people wince.
But in your dreams,
poor toad, you'll
always be a prince.

Fay Slimm 03 May 2009

What a gem this is to read aloud Jerry - - the structure is just right, and the observational element is spot on.... humour wrapped around a few wistful lines is so rare.... and yes, I agree that to us he is a 'poor toad' but wow - to his adoring mate he is a hunk of mighty desire at the right time of year eh? ? ? I loved this one..... greetings from Fay in Cornwall U.K. xx

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Nimal Dunuhinga 16 May 2009

A brief description of an innocent from a compassionate heart!

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Alison Cassidy 12 May 2009

You have made the reader feel so fondly towards your toad. That is your art, my love. Clever lad. Sweet poem. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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Jerry Hughes 06 May 2009

Thanks Susan, Linda and Fay, your comments are much appreciated. Fondly, Jerry

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Susan Jarvis 03 May 2009

'Poor toad' - you evoke such sympathy, I feel a kiss coming on! I like the alliteration and internal rhyme; it paints a vivid picture. S :)

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Linda Ori 03 May 2009

How wonderful - an ode to a toad! Light and fanciful write, Jerry. Not your usual style, but a nice change of pace. I love it! Linda :)

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