Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 452,105 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Total Submission - Poem by Hasmukh Amathalal

Total submission

Sing me a song, lovely lady
I am lost already
Not with your beauty
Or body looking healthy

It was from the beginning
Your face was shining
I was amazed at skill you had
The rumors too were fed

Not that I dreamed in day time
But had thought number of times
It was simple question of acceptance
This was only thing that was keeping me tense

"Hello dear" I head someone's suppressed voice
I turned back to witness without choice
As she was fully ridden in my heart
I always heard her saying and felt as inseparable part

Why don't you send proposal? She was slowly uttering
I doubted the signal as she was reiterating
I smiled back with total submission
It was not felt as guilt's admission

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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/25/2016 9:31:00 AM)


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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (1/25/2016 5:18:00 AM)


    Why don’t you send proposal? She was slowly uttering
    I doubted the signal as she was reiterating
    I smiled back with total submission
    It was not felt as guilt’s admission
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Poem Submitted: Monday, January 25, 2016



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