olawale famodun

Freshman - 722 Points (Lagos Island)

Transformation Of Love - Poem by olawale famodun

Love, I shall call you no more:
You’ve brought me feelings
Laden with hatred.

Topic(s) of this poem: sadness

Form: Haiku

Comments about Transformation Of Love by olawale famodun

  • Fabrizio Frosini (11/4/2015 9:11:00 AM)

    another point:
    haiku don't have a title.. - but the 1st line can be use as a title -
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  • Fabrizio Frosini (11/4/2015 9:08:00 AM)

    it's a good write, Olawale, but not a haiku.
    First, it is about human nature, not Nature - meaning it's a senryu, not a haiku. But you have to modify the 1st line. A haiku, like a senryu, has to have a 5-7-5 syllabic structure.
    A senryu doesn't need a kigo, so it's ok (but also a tiny minority of japanese classical haiku don't express a kigo) .
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  • Souren Mondal (11/4/2015 8:41:00 AM)

    In three lines you have said a lot...

    Thank you for sharing...
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  • Shakil Ahmed (11/4/2015 8:38:00 AM)

    don't get pessimistic, love will come with its colour, you just wait, nice poem, well- composed, (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 4, 2015

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