Trigger Poem by Elizabeth Tyease Collins
Trigger
I pulled the trigger no one would
sit and listen,
I sent myself underground for all the
wrong reasons,
sent all my troubles underground,
spent all my time with my head down,
and I know that I'd be next on
death's list,
even though I knew deep inside I just knew
I had a life to live,
I knew no one would listen to a girl in
pain,
no one would comprehend a girl in
disdain,
am I sure that I was able to live
that life in vain?
Am I sure that love is what I wanted to expect
it to be,
why the trigger hit my brain to dash my
dreams,
he wants to be there but he can't hear me,
in death I am in the dark with everything,
but in real life I am nothing,
maybe a speck of nothingness is all I am,
but I know shutting my heart was what I
never regretted.
Maybe I'm just crazy in the head,
that all I've wished is for me to dead,
but even as I try to comprehend how I
feel,
I know that this bullet in my brain is real.
You have conveyed your feelings powerfully here...yes love can be very disheartening and leave us feeling hopeless but I think we have to try and stay hopeful & love ourselves regardless...
I was hoping against hope that this was about Roy Rogers' horse Trigger. But I knew in my heart it wasn't. So, it is what it is. Sorry about that. Well, this is another cold writing about death. It doesn't make me feel any better than the last one I read. This one is just a bit better written, that's all. I thought the writer set up the ending well. Though I knew it was coming. It needs a better flow to read better, but the rhymes are fairly good. I would say slightly above average. GW62
wow this is really good...every word each sentence is well written
Wonderful..I love this poem..Listen to those who respond..your writing is already wonderful and poetic...i can feel the intenceness and emotion..the pain and inner depression one must have or use to write within this style..you already have this talent Liz...only help you need is convincing your fingers to hit the keys some more and allow us to read what you say..and feel what it is that affects you within..loved it...bring us more.... ~^..^
This is an amazing poem Elizabeth. I agree with Matt Mooney, one day you will have a true force in poetry, yes. And you will be able to change the world. Your already on your way there :) , keep going strong.
Elizabeth, one day you will be a true force in poetry and what is more important in life. Perseverance is the secret of survival and eventual success. Like a boat on the ocean there are storms and swells to survive. Sail away.The world awaits. Peace be with you.
its very sad when a person feels like their nothing there is hope good write
think this is a little confusing on a poem for me any way! but its still really good! ^^
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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a really sad poem. well versed and easy to read. your feelings are very much appreciated. alex