Unborn Poem by Kelsea Osterman
Unborn
You are but a young girl.
A sweet little girl.
Yet you hold my heart.
And you hold my soul.
I love you with all my heart.
And with every ounce of my soul.
You are my reason to get out of bed.
You are my rain and you are my sunshine.
You are the light that is inside me.
You are the girl I always dreamed of.
You are my child.
My flesh and my blood.
I live for you.
I die for you.
You are my world.
You are my darling little girl.
tHIS POEM FLITS FROM HERE TO THERE..i CANT SEE WHAT YOU ARE TRYING TO SAY. iS THIS A CHILD? A METAPHORE. A GOOD SEARCH FOR REASON TO LOVE. KEEP ON. YOUR INTRO IS\ COULD BE UPSETTING TO ONE THAT IS SOFT DUE TO CIRCUMSTANCE.YOU COULD BE JUDGED BEFORE THEYVE READ YOU.
i really enjoyed your poem.. sorry i've taken so long to comment. I hope i'll be as good as you someday :)
Lovely, well written free verse. Read mine - Unborn - or -To Glenda - Adeline
I don't think you establish the theme well enough I like the poem but if you are going for the poem talking about an unborn child you might want to make it more clear then just the title. Right now you poem could be taken to just be talking about a mother or father talking about their little girl. Besides that it is a good poem
A fantastic positive poem of love and affirmation, for either an idea of a child to come or for a baby waiting to be born.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/25/2024 12:28:36 AM # 1.0.0.1119
Its good. I love it when poets will take their writing as far as I will die for you. It adds emotion.