Untitled Poem by Shayli Harris

I agree with the others I think this is a good poem but add some too it...and i think you meant doomed instead of loomed...but its okay we all make mistakes...poetry is hard you just have to work at it....but yeah there is a lil confusion to this...add more to it give more detail...other than that good

Yout fate has loomed? I think you meant to say, your fate is doomed...

who are you talking about? yourself, someone else? once again a nice piece feelings of confusion are seen throughout this. itnense, confusion, and a under lying hint of amazement is what i get from this keep writing i'm loving it.

Your 'untitled' question has been asked by thousands over the centuries and no one really knows unless they've been there - and most of them don't hang round to tell.. I do hope this is fictitious. It's certainly a rather morbid subject from one so young. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥