Karen Alc.

Rookie (December 6, Year of the Boar / New York, USA)

When... - Poem by Karen Alc.

When I gaze into your eyes
I cannot see them, for I see right through them
And it becomes apparent then that I have found my true abode

When I sense your arms around me
I cannot feel them, for my heart goes astray
And I am lost in blissful bewilderment within the fortress that is your soul

When you take my hands within your own
I cannot recognize that it is life, for my mind is in pure ecstasy
And I know what it is to transcend true warmth

When I lay my head on against your heart
I cannot hear it beating, for my spirit takes flight
And I get a glimpse of what it is to have a dream come true

When I think of you and all that you are
I cannot take your existence for granted, for certainty bellows my way
And I realize that my life was meant to be shared with you

April 13,2006


Comments about When... by Karen Alc.

  • (4/13/2006 9:54:00 AM)


    Another sweet and soulful love poem, Karen. I think I'd enjoy this one more if it had more form to it (rhythm, meter, and/or rhyme) as well as more concision in the expressions.
    I truly hope you don't mind my criticisms of your writing, Karen. You know I mean to be constructive. I am also happy to receive constructive criticism on my work.
    Warmest regards,
    Gina.
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  • (4/13/2006 1:03:00 AM)


    Karen, you did it again. It's cool to have you back with yet another beautiful poem.

    Peace.
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 13, 2006

Poem Edited: Thursday, April 13, 2006


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