Where I Go When I Disappear Poem by Luce Darwin

Where I Go When I Disappear



There is a place
Somewhere
A place no one can go
It was built by me
Just for me
This is where I am
This is where I dream
They sometimes ask
Where I go
When I disappear
I go here
Sometimes
You can catch a glimpse
But only through these words
Though I must say
Words can't explain
The only thing there
That causes me pain
Is that I can't take you with me
But only once in awhile
Because it's just for me
It is my dream

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 19 September 2013

let me read this again....i like it. MyPoemList is getting pretty long, but i'll add this to it anyway. many of my poems have very long lines, and sometimes i've chopped each line in half to make the poem look different. i like your short lines; they are very effective. some parts could be misread or perhaps read two different ways because of the lack of punctuation. ok. and the lines: Is that I can't take you with me But only once in awhile.....they throw me a bit. it sounds as though you can't take you with me but once in awhile you/me do/does take you. i especially enjoyed the lines: Sometimes You can catch a glimpse But only through these words ...........thanks for sharing. :)

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Luce Darwin

Luce Darwin

Maine, United States
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