Fay Slimm

Rookie - 102 Points (Ageless. / in Cornwall U.K.)

You Came Along - Poem by Fay Slimm

Under the tremulous arc of limitless sky
I walked alone,
with no feel of belonging to earth or ether,
and not knowing why.
Then I found my soul-space taken.
you came along
and swept clean the mystery place
in my heart.
You taught me love's meaning,
re-charged my fantasy, invaded me
with your amour,
and the shards of my modesty
were soon crushed.
Now we are parted,
I imagine what might have been,
and dream on.
My bloom flowered for a while,
but unfed it died.
Sad regret for the trust I gave
has lately arisen,
and my lust for more loving
not now satisfied.
You showed me a paradise
in which to dwell,
yet my innocence ended
under your spell.


Comments about You Came Along by Fay Slimm

  • (2/5/2012 1:50:00 AM)

    Fay, please read Innocence and Riches. It is a better reply than any comment I could leave here. I wrote it before I read this amazing poem, but I think it a meet answer. Thank you. (Report) Reply

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  • (2/1/2012 10:56:00 PM)

    Interesting interplay of emotions; acknowledging innocence lost, while admitting
    the hungers aroused never satisfied; earthly love is never perfect but its the best
    thing around I've ever heard of..The lines had a delicious cadence that galloped along..all the best to you, Patti :)
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  • (12/18/2009 1:54:00 AM)

    the spell of love is a heavenly one.
    Leslie loved how fay ended the poem.
    flitting conclusion it was.. most fitting.
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  • (12/13/2009 10:50:00 PM)

    fascinating fay gave you all and took it too 10 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, December 13, 2009

Poem Edited: Wednesday, January 6, 2010

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