You Had Me At Hello Poem by Alicia Meyers

You Had Me At Hello



Whenever I looked into your eyes, I saw us being together, being happy. Whenever you looked at me, I got a chill down my spine - not a bad one, a good one. That meant you liked me the way I liked you. And whenever we talked, I felt shy, because I didn't want to say something I'd regret for the rest of my life. Of course I did that. I gave you note asking if you did like me. And you replied saying you liked me as a friend. After all this time, I look back at those days, where your gorgeous blue eyes were looking into my amber eyes, where we talked and asked how we were, I thought you liked me. I thought we could have been together. But as you got onto a different bus on the last day of school, I whispered to myself; I love you - knowing you never loved me. You had me at hello, but that hello was nothing to you.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Adeline Foster 22 February 2012

You have good diction and you express yourself well but this is not really poetry. The best way to write good poetry is to read good poetry. This is actually good prose. Poetry should hint at your subject and the format should have as much impact as the words. I wish you all the best with your ambition to become a writer. Adeline

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Alicia Meyers

Alicia Meyers

Greenville, South Carolina
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