adheez van der beanthz

Rookie - 43 Points (27 May 1980)

My Indonesian - 68 Years Old You Are


Your land emerald equator
treasure barn, star cluster
useless..! !
during prosperity only owned by a handful of people

your sea endless blue
where hope grow and evolve
useless..! !
during the famine still be one boat friends

your reds so gallant
echoed through the spirit that burnt
useless..! !
if limited to discourse and rhetoric

your whites authoritative sacred
radiated through the soul that great
useless..! !
if stained by promises and lies

your ancestors whiz-bang seaman
tame the sublime waves
useless..! !
his successor just a two-faced coward

your emblem the holy Rajawali
true protector that isn't partial
useless..! !
because your Rajawali can be purchased with dollars

you song woo melodious
shouted the beauty of your nature nations
useless..! !
that song already sad, crying in time sequence

your story independence squeals
fight for the freedom of nations
useless..! !
that squeals has been silenced, forced into silence even from within

Earthzcity,250713/160813
created and writed by Jeliansen and Vdb
translated by Vdb

Submitted: Friday, August 16, 2013
Edited: Monday, September 02, 2013

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Poet's Notes about The Poem

I post this poem to welcome my country's Independence Day, which falls on the 17th of August and I saw from the other side the meaning of independence
Independence that was fought with lives and blood, now be exchanged with other types of invaders who more polite but more cruel and inhumane
In the past, blood spilled because of invaders from outside
Now, blood spilled because of the people this own nation
Does independence deserve to celebrated in this country? ? ?
A question that continues to hang in my head every year when Independence Day greeted with parties and joys
Already 68th years of our independence, while hunger, poverty, oppression, discrimination, and corruption is still be daily from people of this country

note of the poem:
@ red and white is the Nation's Flag, which red symbolizes courage and white symbolizes purity
@ Rajawali is the Nation's Emblem, shaped like great-hawk
@ emerald equator is a nickname of this nation

Comments about this poem (My Indonesian - 68 Years Old You Are by adheez van der beanthz )

  • Rookie - 347 Points Danny Draper (9/16/2013 6:15:00 AM)

    Really well considered thoughts about the direction of your country and what
    Independence means. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 126 Points Kelvin Owusu (9/2/2013 4:34:00 AM)

    a great piece of poetry none i can say accept excellent work and tribute (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,593 Points Pranab K Chakraborty (8/27/2013 9:21:00 PM)

    I salute that poet who created such a nice poem to celebrate the independence day of a country. The real citizen always thinks silently the common good for all the people, not for a single segment of a society. Secondly, I thank to Vdb who has jointly translated the poem to know the world-readers the real inner-reality of a country by its socio-economic status. Thirdly, repeated use of the word useless becomes inevitable by its proper use. Thanks for sharing......................Pranab k c (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 519 Points Sally Plumb Plumb (8/27/2013 6:10:00 AM)

    Well, i think we, in this country suffer your complaints too. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,723 Points Heather Wilkins (8/24/2013 8:09:00 PM)

    great write about your country independence. congratulations nice reference to your country (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 95 Points S. Nadia Azam Shah Bukhari (8/19/2013 3:05:00 PM)

    WOW! nice piece of work for your country's Independence Day, with great patriotic feelings. Blessings to you and your country :) (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 291 Points Nasarudheen Parameswaran (8/19/2013 9:19:00 AM)

    A scathing criticism. Truth will be harsh to listen. I love your way of expression.Kindly read my poem I love my country: India, but.. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 35 Points Lucifera Santez (8/18/2013 10:22:00 AM)

    a great piece.
    thanks for the comments.
    :) (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,092 Points Unwritten Soul (8/18/2013 3:23:00 AM)

    Thanks for the detailed note of the poem...To you and All Indonesian my country's neighbor, Happy Independence Day...August could be the month that full of independence days around the world celebrate...May in this month we also find our way to free ourselves to be better souls and life..Freedom in heart! _Soul (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,993 Points S.zaynub Kamoonpuri (8/17/2013 11:07:00 PM)

    A sublime critique of d people's situation n u translatd it eloquently. :) (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,636 Points Dave Walker (8/17/2013 12:24:00 PM)

    The world needs freedom and governments without greed on their mind.
    A great poem. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,545 Points Geetha Jayakumar (8/17/2013 7:59:00 AM)

    Its true and sad, todays world is facing this situations. Independence that was fought with lives and blood,
    it seems there is no value for it...
    Beautiful poem Adheez..Loved reading it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 336 Points David Wood (8/17/2013 5:20:00 AM)

    This seems to be the true state of the world today, the rich rule the poor and get richer in doing so. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 112 Points Maria C. Pires Costa (8/16/2013 5:40:00 PM)

    This is a thoughtful thread fraught with worries, preoccupations towards the sad real living conditions of your beloved country's people.
    May things improve for more balance and prosperity! Long live your country, Adheez! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,774 Points Sallam Yassin (8/16/2013 4:43:00 PM)

    sad and real in the world
    when every thing priced with $
    sad but real /thanks to share bro (Report) Reply

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