Some mechanical changes that do not change the intent of the poem.
proposed and corrected by my dear friend C Cruz
So far away from you
...
You....my single love
You.... my best of
I imagine you when i move
Cause without you i’m done
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Believe me, I run from dying
I know, it's so dumb, but funny trying
WAR, around me everywhere
SOLDIERS, killing everyday, I swear.
...
my name is Toufik born in Rabat, Morocco I'm not writer even poet, cause the truth i can't be good in English it's not my first language i try to write correctly what i feel i Know maybe i can't tell you i'm good writer but i have feeling like you and you like all of us because we are human been so i hope you will enjoy reading my poem and why-not feel what i feel that will be great give me your opinion because i trust in you share with me your feeling when you read what i feel that's all we need and that exactly the meaning of been my friend Sincerely Toufik)
Deep Feeling
Some mechanical changes that do not change the intent of the poem.
proposed and corrected by my dear friend C Cruz
So far away from you
Deep in love with you
If you're not my girl
I will try anything, I could
Everything; because, I should
If not, I will look the fool
Since no one lives without soul
That's why I'll call anytime by phone
Trying not to be alone
although his english isnt good. doesnt mean that others wont understand his beautiful poems of love. both Deep Feeling, Love Speaks, has the most tremendous meaning of love! ~Bella
I love that you try so hard with your english to deliver this truly incredible poem to the world. I agree with Jack Green... I don't know if anything more poetic exists that truly comes from the heart... If you wouldn't mind, I would love it if you could critique my poetry... -nicki