Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 390,136 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

A Closed Eyes - Poem by Hasmukh Amathalal

I closed eyes passionately
Your response had come very lately
It was longed from the day one
I dreamed of you only and none

You were avoiding the scene
Your commitment was not at all seen
You lacked some courage and strength
I was on correct wave length

You sprang surprise all of sudden
You bore nice smile from face sullen
It was major upset turning into embarrassment
You were all out for suspicious movement

It was clear dig at me
You made it look completely free
I waited eagerly for all these days
You deliberately stayed far and long away

It was definitely change in your style
I was amused and wondered for a while
You gently moved and tightly embraced
Such dilemma I had never faced

It offered me unique joy and happiness
It was pleasant surprise to remove loneliness
What to say more about it or less?
I was prepared to accept it in any case

I remained quiet and silent
It was pride and happy moment
He had seen the point and realized
I surrendered without things to be analyzed

I was full of confidence and it was matter of joy
I didn’ t want to waste and completely enjoy
It comes once a while in life to illuminate
You feel equal to fall in line and peacefully narrate


Comments about A Closed Eyes by Hasmukh Amathalal

  • (9/2/2010 12:46:00 PM)


    Very nice flow and passion to it. I could feel every word (Report) Reply

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  • (8/6/2010 5:40:00 AM)


    I closed eyes passionately
    Your response had come very lately
    It was longed from the day one....... it was late response....10
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  • (8/5/2010 11:24:00 PM)


    It was longed from the day one
    I dreamed of you only and none
    ... good compnionship....10
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, August 5, 2010



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