i hear the name
and my world revolves
a name for angels
beautiful beyond imagining
a name of goddesses
dressed in silk clothes
the name of my angel
wonderful beyond creation
a name for my daughter
if ever i have one
to light my world
as it does at the moment
for truly its a name for angels
The content of this is beautiful, but it would benefit from a little revision, possibly adding some punctuation.
Hi man you really impressed me.. this is a poem reflecting the matured innocence... nice thought keep the spirt alive.. live in present think the future gr8 attitude...
I really enjoyed reading this although I believe Saurabh Som was right about the rythme not being definite. There are two things I would write differently. I would change this lines: 'dressed in clothes of silk ' to this: 'dressed in silk cloth' I would also change the 'tis' in the last line to 'it's' Overall, you've captured the emotion perfectly and I believe the impact poetry has emotionally on it's readers is by far the most important thing. In this you have succeed where many others don't. Well done.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Hamid, a lovely poem. I too love my daughter greatly. Daughters are embodiments of love & affection and no wonder we get swayed. As in your apt words, they are truly beautiful in their innermost heart beyond imagination.