if i had a son
i'll show him care
so as to have love
i'll give him money
so as to have more
id show him compassion
so that he'll be my companion
i'll teach him spanking
sothat he'll know his wrongs
i'll show him life
so that he'll learn to give
i'll show him the world
so he'll supress his greed
I wrote this before, your gone make a super cool dad..keep writing. I enjoyed the rhythem, sound and all. Very nice Hamid
i can't wait till you have a kid of your own your child will love you.. xoxxo loves clarissa
Another very good concept for a poem, I think if you should give this one another try, and see if a lil bit of improvement could help out.
...and I will show him the sun so as to ensure that he is sure that tomorrow will not be dull if today he stays firm like a rock. Very good poem.
beyond all these teach him to look deep into self.... teach him to search Allah deep inside his mind... that's what you have to do O son of Allah benefactor of all...
this is a great poem but i think all fathers would take care of their children i think the fact that you wrote this poem shows that your own father was not that good to you or at least you think so and that is why you are trying to prommise yourself that you would be a better father than him i might be wrong but whatever caused you to write this poem is fine im, just glad you wrote it: D
I agree with Sucide King... Great idea for a poem however it seems to be a string a thoughts written down... I think it could be reworded in a more poetic form... ~Lacey~
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Between father and son spiritual DNA crosses over untold stories of war raise armies in sinews wisdom of centuries sneaks into existence in declamations, declarations or just mere admission of love Thanks Hamid- your work inspired this impromptu