David Sabo

Rookie (December 2nd,1990 / Oklahoma City)

A Shadow From The Past - Poem by David Sabo

First draft

A shadow from the past is creeping out
A shallow hourglass
as the days pass i count

How did we get here?
reasons left unclear
Memories held so dear
Let them drift away.

I just need to be free
of these guilty memories

All the weigh i hold
is crushing me

an inablitly
to release
what a disease

you have nothing to apologize for
thank you for everything.

Completely revised

A prophetic assumption
A lesson learned in corruption

A shadow from the past is creeping out
A shallow hour glass, as the days pass i count

A Flame to the candle
A Fire in the eyes
A Blade to the knife
Blood in the skies

Things aint been the same, since you painted the town grey
Thats okay, cos things havent really changed

You speak about blood in the streets
reality is closer than you think
violence like silence spread
across a guilty sea
there is no bargain plea
pay back, restitution we seek
sorrow you have sown
fruitition is at its peak

a coldness rising from the floor
close your blinds and lock your door
a darkness setting in
lie down and pretend you dont exist

forget not the wisdom of old
these things have been fortold


Comments about A Shadow From The Past by David Sabo

  • (6/7/2011 8:27:00 PM)


    yeahh i like this. its really...dark. in a way. but its so..true. your a great poet and dont change it (Report) Reply

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  • (12/31/2009 2:13:00 PM)


    i liked it^^, but it seems that you words were rushed in a way. Maybe if you pull out the feeling and draw them out our depiction of your poem would have a better meaning. =] A very good read^^ (Report) Reply

  • (12/26/2009 9:16:00 PM)


    Yes, as well as being a good expression of feelings, this work has potential as a very good poem.
    Irene
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  • (12/26/2009 8:52:00 PM)


    its not that bad dude
    its pretty darn good
    just make sure u have the feeling come out
    so i can feel ur pain or ur feelings
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  • James Casey (12/26/2009 5:40:00 PM)


    David, A lost True love crushes all of us at one time or another. When the realization that the other person ' has nothing to apologize for ' you've come a long way towards healing (Report) Reply

  • (12/25/2009 11:28:00 PM)


    i agree with Sara, drastic memories
    like your memories are coming back
    it's a nice poem
    i enjoyed it
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  • (12/25/2009 10:55:00 PM)


    Hmm kind of a twist,
    much of a general realization of the guilt from the drastic memories.
    that pull you deeper and deeper into a hole,
    but the ending goes into a strange twist that makes the poem
    bright,
    thank you for everything.
    i guess its the same story throughout but seems sorta like a twist
    i reallly enjoyed it
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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 25, 2009

Poem Edited: Wednesday, January 13, 2010


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