NAYANIKA DEY

Veteran Poet - 1,552 Points (29th October,1993 / Durgapur, West Bengal, India)

A Story Of An Insignificant Mother - Poem by NAYANIKA DEY

A story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

When sledgehammered, pickaxed
Excavated, craned and the progress of
The ceaseless destruction of
Demolished construction railed.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

With wings flapped and heart ached, the dove
An emblem of peace hovered and levitated for some tranquillity for itself,
As the stuccoes tore to rain
With rusted flatirons and hanging windowpanes.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

Her silent shrieks and mum squeals
With chaos within and mayhem sealed,
As the bricks crumpled down
And built heaps on heaths.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

Then some final cavalcades,
And encroaching gust
Of wrecking ball reconvened
And collapsing of the structure prevailed.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

Thrust onto the ground,
Smashed and crushed
Her nest that was on the old windowpane
With two little hatchlings dead and broken.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

Soaked and smeared was the sod
With trivial bloodstains,
As a merely existing mother
Lost her kids to developments.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

As the smokes of ruination came to rest
With dust of mourns settling on her crest,
Flew she away with unseen tears on facade
To an unknown destination of maybe another catastrophic shade.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

~Nayanika Dey

From: India
Copyright ©: 31 July,2016

Topic(s) of this poem: development, environment, peace, war, wildlife

Form: Free Verse


Comments about A Story Of An Insignificant Mother by NAYANIKA DEY

  • Sankar SarkarSankar Sarkar (7/1/2019 9:02:00 AM)

    Both reality and philosophy get immersed into this poem that emits poetic flavor, and it deserves undoubtedly a touching work.....i enjoyed a lot (Report)Reply

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (7/5/2017 8:41:00 PM)

    COMMENT CONTINUED!

    i don't know what 'flatiron' refers to in the poem. not an iron for ironing clothes! maybe some iron building material?

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    Her silent shrieks and mum squeals
    With chaos within and mayhem sealed,
    As the bricks crumpled down
    And built heaps on heaths....................i do NOT say it is wrong, but i'll point out what you may already.................................................know: 'silent' and 'mum' are synonyms. and i think 'chaos' and 'mayhem' are the same (i think) .

    as for crumpled, i refer to this i found online:

    Wikidiff.com Find the difference between words.
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    crumple | crumble |


    As nouns the difference between crumple and crumble is that crumple is a crease, wrinkle, or irregular fold while crumble is a dessert of british origin containing stewed fruit topped with a crumbly mixture of fat, flour, and sugar.
    As verbs the difference between crumple and crumble is that crumple is to rumple; to press into wrinkles by crushing together while crumble is to fall apart; to disintegrate.

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    ok, i've finished reading but will (at this time at least) only make one additional comment on the grammar.



    so, i think crumbled is a better choice in the poem.

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    To an unknown destination of may be another catastrophic shade.....i say maybe, not may be is..........................................proper here.

    i DO like the poem! i do. i do. and it was a fine surprise ending you wrote. the mother was insignificant to most humans, but not to all creatures. i wish her well! !

    to MyPoemList

    bri :)
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    Nayanika DeyNayanika Dey(7/10/2017 9:55:00 AM)

    Thank you so much!

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (7/5/2017 4:42:00 PM)

    i looked up the verb trailed, both intransitive and transitive usages. so many definitions! ! ! i THINK you are indicating that the story of the mother is to follow. if that is so, it is an incomplete sentence, and i think i'd use a comma in front of trailed. being in a poem, you can get away with not using a complete sentence more 'easily' than if you were writing prose. but, as the author, you ARE the boss of the poem and readers will like or not! ;) :)

    is THIS the definition of railed you are using in stanza 2?

    4 rail
    verb
    Definition of rail

    intransitive verb

    : to revile or scold in harsh, insolent, or abusive language
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    the use of both hovered and levitated in one line is almost redundant, as here is what i found:

    lev·i·tate
    ˈlevəˌtāt/
    verb
    past tense: levitated; past participle: levitated

    rise or cause to rise and hover in the air, especially by means of supernatural or magical power.
    he seems to levitate about three inches off the ground
    synonyms: float, rise, rise into the air, hover, be suspended, glide, hang, fly, soar up
    the spaceship slowly levitated over the cornfield
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    i haven't finished reading or commenting, but i have to get off the computer for a while. i may return in a few hours.

    :) bri

    it is holding my interest!
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  • Siddartha MontikSiddartha Montik (7/4/2017 3:56:00 AM)

    Simply Amazing.. even the title itself..! ! So much meaning with wonderful Depth! !

    As the smokes of ruination came to rest
    With dust of mourns settling on her crest,
    Flew she away with unseen tears on facade
    To an unknown destination of may be another catastrophic shade.! ! Thank you for sharing Poet.. and thanks for invitation! 10+++++!
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    Nayanika DeyNayanika Dey(7/4/2017 6:36:00 AM)

    Tons of thanks dear Sir for such a beautiful compliment!

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Poem Submitted: Friday, June 30, 2017

Poem Edited: Thursday, July 6, 2017


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