NAYANIKA DEY

Durgapur, West Bengal, India
NAYANIKA DEY
Durgapur, West Bengal, India
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A Story Of An Insignificant Mother

Rating: 4.3
A story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.

When sledgehammered, pickaxed
Excavated, craned and the progress of
The ceaseless destruction of
Demolished construction railed.

So is a story
Of an insignificant mother trailed.
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Friday, June 30, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: development,environment,peace,war,wildlife
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Sankar Sarkar 01 July 2019
Both reality and philosophy get immersed into this poem that emits poetic flavor, and it deserves undoubtedly a touching work.....i enjoyed a lot
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Bri Edwards 05 July 2017
COMMENT CONTINUED! i don't know what 'flatiron' refers to in the poem. not an iron for ironing clothes! maybe some iron building material? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Her silent shrieks and mum squeals With chaos within and mayhem sealed, As the bricks crumpled down And built heaps on heaths....................i do NOT say it is wrong, but i'll point out what you may already.................................................know: 'silent' and 'mum' are synonyms. and i think 'chaos' and 'mayhem' are the same (i think) . as for crumpled, i refer to this i found online: Wikidiff.com Find the difference between words. What's the difference between and Crumple vs Crumble - What's the difference? AddThis Sharing Buttons Share to Google BookmarkShare to FacebookShare to TwitterShare to PrintShare to More crumple | crumble | As nouns the difference between crumple and crumble is that crumple is a crease, wrinkle, or irregular fold while crumble is a dessert of british origin containing stewed fruit topped with a crumbly mixture of fat, flour, and sugar. As verbs the difference between crumple and crumble is that crumple is to rumple; to press into wrinkles by crushing together while crumble is to fall apart; to disintegrate. ============================= ok, i've finished reading but will (at this time at least) only make one additional comment on the grammar. so, i think crumbled is a better choice in the poem. ====================================== To an unknown destination of may be another catastrophic shade.....i say maybe, not may be is..........................................proper here. i DO like the poem! i do. i do. and it was a fine surprise ending you wrote. the mother was insignificant to most humans, but not to all creatures. i wish her well! ! to MyPoemList bri :)
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Nayanika Dey 10 July 2017
Thank you so much!
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Bri Edwards 05 July 2017
i looked up the verb trailed, both intransitive and transitive usages. so many definitions! ! ! i THINK you are indicating that the story of the mother is to follow. if that is so, it is an incomplete sentence, and i think i'd use a comma in front of trailed. being in a poem, you can get away with not using a complete sentence more 'easily' than if you were writing prose. but, as the author, you ARE the boss of the poem and readers will like or not! ;) :) is THIS the definition of railed you are using in stanza 2? 4 rail verb Definition of rail intransitive verb : to revile or scold in harsh, insolent, or abusive language - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - the use of both hovered and levitated in one line is almost redundant, as here is what i found: lev·i·tate 'lev??tat/ verb past tense: levitated; past participle: levitated rise or cause to rise and hover in the air, especially by means of supernatural or magical power. he seems to levitate about three inches off the ground synonyms: float, rise, rise into the air, hover, be suspended, glide, hang, fly, soar up the spaceship slowly levitated over the cornfield =================================================== i haven't finished reading or commenting, but i have to get off the computer for a while. i may return in a few hours. :) bri it is holding my interest!
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Siddartha Montik 04 July 2017
Simply Amazing.. even the title itself..! ! So much meaning with wonderful Depth! ! As the smokes of ruination came to rest With dust of mourns settling on her crest, Flew she away with unseen tears on facade To an unknown destination of may be another catastrophic shade.! ! Thank you for sharing Poet.. and thanks for invitation! 10+++++!
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Nayanika Dey 04 July 2017
Tons of thanks dear Sir for such a beautiful compliment!
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