A Thunderstorm Poem by Hezekiah Tiamiyu

A Thunderstorm

Rating: 4.1

Whirling from the west,
Madly running without rest,
Sharply, all vests abreast.
Windvanes runs out to the test,
The wind is truly from the west.

As the wind sweeps along the paths,
Like a king trees bow as he pass.
Is this arrival not a world class?
Every lass the mighty tree has,
Falls as the wind proves his class.

The pregnant cloud takes her form,
Saying the pregnant cloud is set to born,
Once again a very mighty storm.
All white and yellow to black they turn.
Thence comes that heavy thunderstorm.

Darting in and out, madly.
Traders praying, 'Rain go away, ' sadly,
Children, out with their pants, happily,
Dancing, singing, 'Rain, rain fall heavily'
As the rain pours down madly.

The poem gives us a picture of a storm....the activities of things related to a storm..... 'Lass' in line 8 means leaves.... Line 14 and 15 tells of d change in colour of d atmosphere.....

This has a nice rhyme scheme...Your structure needs some work so that each line will flow smoothly into the next.Hhowever, for the most part it is in synch, and I enjoyed the read...~FjR~.

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Unwritten Soul 03 July 2012

You creating a rhythmic in a nice rhyme, it is another form than the first one i read, again you did a good job..The future still one of the different..i like both of these poem, keep it up for more_Unwritten Soul

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Ken E Hall 05 July 2012

A day when the clouds look grey and the thunder storms gather and the king trees bow...nice to read in your style...regards

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Anita Sehgal 07 July 2012

mood for appreciating the beauty of the rains... well created

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Karen Sinclair 30 June 2012

A lovely write in a traditional form.... enjoyable, well formed and I like that there is much thought in the structure...tyvm.. karen

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Jasbir Chatterjee 07 July 2014

nice poem...I like the way it builds up to the climax towards the end...

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Jayatissa K. Liyanage 07 July 2014

I like your metaphoric expressions particularly, in this poem. Nice write.

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David Wood 07 July 2013

Well done on making member poet of the day, very good imagery used in your poem.

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Simon Odhiambo 11 July 2012

Good use of imagery...I admire this so so so much.

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Karen Sinclair 07 July 2012

Beautifully unusual...pregnant clouds and children engrossed in the weather, singing and dancing...lovely tyvm karen

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Hezekiah Tiamiyu

Hezekiah Tiamiyu

Lagos state, Nigeria
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