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A Waltz Wave: Fall Leaves Fly

Rating: 3.2

leaves fly
the bus
moving through
child's face
pressed against
the window looks

out at folks -
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Monday, October 5, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: autumn
Meggie Gultiano 16 October 2009

I love this..A nice write! ! !

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Brenda Arroyo 14 October 2009

A sweet melodic picture to my mind.

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Kerry O'Connor 14 October 2009

A fine example of this form. You have really made it your own. This is a beautifully poignant word picture.

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Mark Nwagwu 13 October 2009

slim; compact; deliberate; speedy - and it goes away, like the falling leaves of fall, a blur - bot only temporary, temporarily. Much enjoyed this, Lillian,10, not a blur; a real ten, more than 9.999 - a real 10 mark

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Sonya Florentino 06 October 2009

very nice atmosphere...season changing....time passing....

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Adeline Foster 22 October 2011

Good this! Read mine - Leave Leaves - Adeline

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Ray Schreiber 11 February 2010

Lillian, I came here to revisit some of your poems...this Waltz Wave is a fine one.

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Dr. Ratan Bhattacharjee 23 January 2010

I also wante to fly like these leaves. U moved my mind with ur poem... nice, excellent, fantastic but so simple imagination....

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Susan Jarvis 29 October 2009

This wonderful poem waltzes along at a breathtaking pace, drawing the reader into the swirl of of autumn leaves as the bus rolls along. You certainly know how to use this strict syllable count to optimum effect. S :)

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Simply captivating Lillian. I is like a long haiku that leaves one with a breathlessness of capturing something so beautiful that others pass by without ever knowing what they have missed out seeing. 10 love Karin

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