Khairul Ahsan

Gold Star - 23,536 Points (13 December / Bangladesh)

Across The Continents - Poem by Khairul Ahsan

Two birds lived continents apart,
Both in the last quarter of their lives.
When one flew out from its nest at dawn,
The other returned home just the same time,
After a day's hard work. They had their own language,
But one of the two could speak the other's language too.

Though while one slept, the other worked,
Yet they used to have some kind of connection.
They conversed at leisure through submarine cables.
Despite their antipodal locations, they stayed in touch.
Suddenly one lost contact with the other, which was
Not a very unnatural thing to happen, so it happened....

Then what? ? ?

Comments about Across The Continents by Khairul Ahsan

  • (2/25/2014 2:17:00 PM)

    Suddenly one lost contact with the other
    and as the clock stopped so did their hearts
    as the rolling seas fell silent.........................
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  • Gary H (12/24/2013 1:35:00 AM)

    Good work as all ways sir. (Report) Reply

  • Khairul Ahsan (12/14/2013 10:43:00 AM)

    @Lasoaphia Quxazs
    Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your thoughtful comments. I am truly inspired.
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  • Khairul Ahsan (12/14/2013 9:35:00 AM)

    @ Noreen Carden,
    Thanks for sharing your thoughts on my poem. Your nice words are really encouraging.
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  • Khairul Ahsan (12/14/2013 9:15:00 AM)

    @Valsa George,
    Thanks for sharing your thoughts on my poem. Thanks for appreciating the 'special charm' of the poem that tells us of a transcontinental bond, with an unanswered question at the end.
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  • Connie Yost (12/13/2013 6:46:00 PM)

    There may be a happy ending, but I hope instead it becomes a happy new cable line. This touches our hearts for-sure. (Report) Reply

  • Naida Nepascua Supnet (12/4/2013 6:36:00 PM)

    I believe in happy ending, so I am thinking, they will still get in touch and who knows next- - (I seem to be very affected, funny.) (Report) Reply

  • (12/4/2013 5:50:00 AM)

    i agree with Valsa..
    This is a poem that looks simple, but has the power and charm of its own
    and I really liked the ending
    beautiful poem, thanks for sharing friend
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  • Heather Wilkins (12/3/2013 6:39:00 PM)

    this could also reflect on two people getting to know each other living in different countries.. today it is easy to connect across countries, nice work (Report) Reply

  • Martina Danielova (12/2/2013 4:07:00 PM)

    They conversed at leisure through submarine cables... this line is excellent.

    It was a prosaic poem about reality of two - which are connected trough the space, still, not deeply enough.

    and then what?

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  • Lasoaphia Quxazs (12/2/2013 9:45:00 AM)

    Very good observation of life. Anyway when 2 person cannot teach each other anymore, they will separate. (Report) Reply

  • Noreen Carden (11/26/2013 5:23:00 PM)

    I agree with Valsa this poem has charm i love that we are left to make up our own minds about what happened
    good read well done
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  • Valsa George (11/26/2013 10:43:00 AM)

    This trans continental bond has a rare charm and poignancy! Both being in the last quarter of their lives, when abruptly one lost contact with the other, we can possibly guess what happened!
    Then what? ? The question remains! ! This poem has a special charm! !
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  • Khairul Ahsan (11/26/2013 8:37:00 AM)

    @ Lucifera Santez,
    Yes, a cliffhanger of sorts. Thanks for reading my poem and leaving your kind words here.
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  • Lucifera Santez (11/26/2013 4:14:00 AM)

    cliffhanger eh?
    but it was good to read,
    the story of two lost souls living apart.
    it was touching.
    good work again.
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  • Khairul Ahsan (11/24/2013 12:56:00 PM)

    @ Lisa Rhodes,
    Thank you very much for reading my poem so soon, within minutes, and for your valuable suggestion.
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  • (11/24/2013 12:45:00 PM)

    I find the storyline very interesting. I think I like the poem to end on then what. It seems like a good cliff hanger. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, November 24, 2013

Poem Edited: Monday, November 25, 2013

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