Afri-Rhea Poem by Nate Tulay

Afri-Rhea

Rating: 4.8


You may have forgotten, forgotten about
the paradise, the paradise far far away,
and of the goddess who died, who died
from love and her passion to nurture
others, for it was a long, long time ago,
in a land too far away, that this goddess
and I fell in love, in love with an idea,
an idea known as tomorrow, an idea so
magical, so magical that it scarred us,
that it scarred my Afri-Rhea and me forever;
For although our love is still radiating,
and our hearts are now a day away, I am
still lost, still lost within her magic to walk
away, to walk away from our tomorrow.

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
The Goddess Afri-Rhea is a nurturer and lover... and the guy has fallen in love with nurturing and love to the point that he rather nurture and love others then go back home to visit his wife Afri-Rhea... but first, he has to die within his current body to gain the ability to go back home.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 08 May 2022

I like the repeating of words, as though you are emphasizing your thoughts. bri : ) I'd read a Poet's Note(s) if you posted one.

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Nate Tulay 08 May 2022

Thanks Bri, it is a new style I stumbled across not too long ago. And thanks for the feedback and comments, I really appreciate and value them.

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Bri Edwards 08 May 2022

Nate: '... still lost within her magic to walk' How about '....still TOO lost within her magic to walk'? Some of the poem is fuzzy for me, but I like it

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Nate Tulay 08 May 2022

The Goddess Afri-Rhea is a nurturer and lover... and the guy has fallen in love with nurturing and love to the point that he rathers nurture and love others then to back home to visit his wife Afri-Rhea... but first, he has to die within his current body to gain the ability to go back home.

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Bri Edwards 08 May 2022

At end of first stanza: Do you want 'scarred' (scar) or 'scared' (scare) ? ?

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Nate Tulay 08 May 2022

scar

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