As The Sunset Poem by brittany smith

As The Sunset

Rating: 5.0


As the sunset I think to myself why.
As the sunset I sit down and cry.
Wondering why life got to be a lie.

As the sunset I dropp my head.
As the sunset I think about you instead.
How can I go home and get in my bed.

As the sunset I say no.
As the sunset I just don't know.
My love that I have for u just wont go.

As the sunset I look to the sky.
As the sunset I wait to die.
Tell me how to say good-bye.

As the sunset I say a prayer.
As the sunset how can I dare.
I'm giving up, I just don't care.

Sitting by the window watching the sun to set.
Knowing I'm going to see you again,
and you coming back home at the end.

By: Brittany Smith
9/25/08

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Shannon Monroe 25 September 2008

It was a very good poem... I liked it.

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David Threadgold 25 September 2008

Hi Brittany. A very romantic and nicely written peice well done.

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Ryan Thompson 29 September 2008

i like this it is nice -ryan

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Stacey Watts 01 October 2008

This is a beautiful heartfelt piece. I truly enjoyed reading it. I think you hav alot of talent.

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junior frontilus 01 October 2008

hey i lik dat one i can tell it's come from ur heart

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Tim Honeycutt 15 June 2009

This is truly wrote from the heart. wonderful in many ways

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Dowell Oba 25 October 2008

Great poem Brittany, you really carried me along on every powerful expression expressed. I love the powerful rhymes in these lines 'As d sunset how can I dare, I'm goin up, I just don't care' Thanks for making me happy with your creativity!

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Alancia Lebogang Mogorosi 03 October 2008

lovely poem, how you took the sense of nature and penned it. love it

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John Mogodi 02 October 2008

Hi Brittany, good honest work, you have the ability to paint a real vivd picture without using too many adjectives. love it. Cant wait to read more of you work

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Javier Falcon 01 October 2008

As I have noticed you are from the Sunshine state, as only a true Floridian can admire the meaning of the sun. I really like your poem, the structure is superb and matches my own. Hope to read more soon... Great write. -Sincerely Jay Falcon USA

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