brittany smith

As The Sunset

As the sunset I think to myself why.
As the sunset I sit down and cry.
Wondering why life got to be a lie.

As the sunset I dropp my head.
As the sunset I think about you instead.
How can I go home and get in my bed.

As the sunset I say no.
As the sunset I just don't know.
My love that I have for u just wont go.

As the sunset I look to the sky.
As the sunset I wait to die.
Tell me how to say good-bye.

As the sunset I say a prayer.
As the sunset how can I dare.
I'm giving up, I just don't care.

Sitting by the window watching the sun to set.
Knowing I'm going to see you again,
and you coming back home at the end.

By: Brittany Smith
9/25/08

Poem Submitted: Thursday, September 25, 2008
Poem Edited: Monday, September 29, 2008

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  • Tim Honeycutt (6/15/2009 4:00:00 PM)

    This is truly wrote from the heart. wonderful in many ways

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  • Dowell Oba (10/25/2008 2:02:00 AM)

    Great poem Brittany, you really carried me along on every powerful expression expressed. I love the powerful rhymes in these lines 'As d sunset how can I dare, I'm goin up, I just don't care' Thanks for making me happy with your creativity!

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  • Alancia Lebogang Mogorosi (10/3/2008 4:48:00 PM)

    lovely poem, how you took the sense of nature and penned it. love it

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  • John Mogodi (10/2/2008 6:36:00 AM)

    Hi Brittany, good honest work, you have the ability to paint a real vivd picture without using too many adjectives. love it. Cant wait to read more of you work

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  • Javier FalconJavier Falcon (10/1/2008 2:28:00 PM)

    As I have noticed you are from the Sunshine state, as only a true Floridian can admire the meaning of the sun. I really like your poem, the structure is superb and matches my own. Hope to read more soon... Great write.

    -Sincerely
    Jay Falcon
    USA

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  • Sylvia ChidiSylvia Chidi (10/1/2008 12:20:00 PM)

    I really enjoyed this. Good write!

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  • junior frontilus (10/1/2008 9:25:00 AM)

    hey i lik dat one i can tell it's come from ur heart

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  • Stacey Watts (10/1/2008 8:59:00 AM)

    This is a beautiful heartfelt piece. I truly enjoyed reading it. I think you hav alot of talent.

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  • Ryan Thompson (9/29/2008 12:55:00 PM)

    i like this it is nice

    -ryan

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  • David ThreadgoldDavid Threadgold (9/25/2008 12:34:00 PM)

    Hi Brittany. A very romantic and nicely written peice well done.

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  • Shannon Monroe (9/25/2008 12:28:00 PM)

    It was a very good poem... I liked it.

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