Autobiographical Fairy Tale Comments

Childhood is full of suppressed fears, parents suddenly transformed into monsters, but as you write in your last line, it's all 'forgotten'. Until you grow up and write a poem about it. Which reaches all of us. Thank you. Linda

rough childhood and parents have the illusion that if they stay together is better for the kids.. HBH

dear max, the ending kills the poem. sorry have to be frank.

These are powerful sentiments, Max. For some reason, your poem reminds me of the Beatles' song, 'She's Leaving Home' - a serious theme conveyed in a plainspoken, straightforward way.

Alice Miller FOR THEIR OWN GOOD is a fabulous book regarding the current parenting paradigm. I work with adults who grew up in these homes....the poem with its use of 'mythic' tropes....some kids may get it....some won't...most adults who 'know' will definitely get it. Nice job.

Hey, Max, I think the kids got fed up and ran away from home (read my 'crooked fairy tale') ! I wasn't sure whether to laugh or cry at this, but that's what makes it so real, isn't it?

I think many have this sort of life but never say anything about it. It brought up memories of a friend of mine who did live in that kind of situation but she found a way out. It is a very good poem Max.

I think this poem will describe 'home' for many. It brings many feelings from childhood up for me...today I think this is very common so you've hit the nail on the head for many. I don't think there is such thing as 'too honest'. Great poem. (and I LOVE the quick rhyming pattern...it almost gives it a sense of a witty sarcastic conversation) Sincerely, Mary

I liked the first one but the revision is definitely much better. This poem hits uncomfortably close to home for me - it reminds me of parts of my first marriage. avr