Better Forgotten, Forsaken Poem by Alen Alexander

Better Forgotten, Forsaken

Rating: 4.8


isnt it frustrating
isnt it sad
when you work so hard
and it all goes bad

am still working for it
but i think at times, why so?
cause all i gain to myself
is to see my dear ones happy, and make it sure!

i've been breaking my head
even when am sick and almost dead,
its hard for me too,
am weak and can't even tread

am sitting in the midst of a multitude
they think am fine
am tired, am feeble,
and i get no sleep of mine

its their ignorance
its their deed,
that gets me bad,
cause they dont give any heed

i dont have any cold
this isnt any flu
its my body gettin itself bad
cause it couldnt see the happiness in you

all ive been running for
dying for, was to see them all free
from their problems, and troubles
even it needed to risk me

its better to have me forgotten,
forsaken, unknown and dead,
than trying hard to have them live nice but be helpless
and be eventually hurt and left bereft

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

to die for and to risk everything to see others is happy is very seflless..but happiness from them, you cannot control, for they hold that within their hands..be happy for yourself and for what you had tried to do for other's sake because not everyone can be giving as you..happiness within is happiness that will overflow and be shared..don't be so hard on yourself. :) good work though.. :) keep'm coming

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Thomas Coltrin 16 July 2009

i loved it it was good.........a 10

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Eyan Desir 14 July 2009

....hmmm interesting...write..10s

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oh sorry Alen..didnot know hat your poem is sad..but the sadness is source of the creation so use it to produce beautiful poem always..well said poem..

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Ted M 14 July 2009

Good idea, nice choice of words, good rhyme, beautiful flow. Can't say I like the last para though. think positive, Great talent to write stuff like this. Best wishes Alen.

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Asma Khan 24 March 2010

The poem shows about your nature, how selflessly you want to make others happy. I enjoyed reading it, it's really good. Thanks for sharing it.

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Nooruddeen Mm 10 October 2009

Good flow and beautiful write, but bit sad. Rgds Nooruddeen

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Alen Alexander 04 August 2009

Mariah Simpson said: good poem i like it :)

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Mona Martinez 20 July 2009

nice to read, it was really good i enjoyed it.

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Jazz Annis 18 July 2009

hey...wow that was a really good write! sorry it took so long to read it...lol but anyway that was really good...

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