Bill The Suicide Poem by Jimi Doyle

Bill The Suicide

Rating: 5.0


cold grief or demented vacuum?

grey head in coffin
suicide neck

drunken sorry note (with misspellings)
something nice about everyone (i love you)
debts owed to companies (many thousands)
punk kids from the other marriage (haircuts at the wake)

martyrdom of dust and tedious fear

ordinary con job
with thank you notes and symmetry
(the wife who found his body)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Adeline Foster 30 November 2011

Ah, so sad, A friend of yours? Well expressed and a good job. Read mine - Eternal Grief - Adeline

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Cynthia Buhain-baello 01 December 2009

Graphic, very strong, and honest. You put it all together in these lines as matter-of-factly as possible, for suicides always cause a disruption of emotions and thoughts. (My brother did it and I wrote 'Frankie' for him.) 10+

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Evil Angel 16 January 2008

drunken sorry note (with misspellings) hehe like that stuff when details come out like that nice shet: }

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