Bonsai Poem by Yasmin Khan

Bonsai

Rating: 4.5


Emerald verse
Bejeweled with
Rubies ablaze
Pruned rhymes
In neat syllables
Boughs in prime
Beauty in miniature
As mirrored in a dew
Dwarf in stature
But celestial growth
Essence of forests
Tall in some grove
Now caresses a pot
A delightful trove
Rests on a sill
Kissed by sun
In breeze it thrills
Delights my heart
The work of artifice
That rests in a pot

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
When I saw a beautiful picture of a hibiscus bonsai
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Aftab Alam Khursheed 08 May 2013

every word chosen is shining, Rests on a sill, Kissed by sun//The work of artifice, That rests in a pot skilfully crafted with the meaning deep than

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S.zaynab Kamoonpuri 07 May 2013

An exquisitely crafted poem. Do coment mine too.

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Yasmin Khan 13 May 2013

Thanks for comments and review. I will try to improve upon it.

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Wahab Abdul 13 May 2013

lovely one but if i say one negative point of the piece that would be that the narration is lacking a kick or punch and that is too flat.......

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Chandra Thiagarajan 11 May 2013

Just as the bonsai arrests our attention your poem is arresting and lovely, Jasmeen!

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Valsa George 09 May 2013

This poem is a bonsai of your description! A beauty in miniature, a dwarf in stature and bejewelled with rubies ablaze! ! A truely great poem! ! Thank you for your sweet comment and your interpretation of my poem in all dimensions intended! !

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Shahzia Batool 08 May 2013

a concentrated piece...beautiful!

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