Broken Down Poem by Tailor Bell

Broken Down

Rating: 4.9


Out of my mind
Dug her up again
Her shiny coat
Pulled tight
My tears falling
Onto her perfect eyes
Please, oh please
My wails carried around
Come with me
Awaken now
My special clown
You cannot
Sleep here
With these
Strangers
Hard
Silent roots
And flimsy leaves
Held her close
Until we were
Found

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
David Dennis 02 December 2006

I read that as a beloved dog and an accident of some sort... 'perfect eyes' is a lovely phrase. I think its now stuck in my subconscious and I will pull it out one day thinking its mine.

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Kristoffer Pedersen 21 November 2006

A very strong and well written poem Tailor. Can really feel the pain in this poem. Kristoffer

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Melvina Germain 14 October 2006

Thought wrenching, touching, pounding heartfelt words followed by the intense pain felt by the great loss of a truly special friend. Tailor you've done it again, fabulous---Melvina---

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James Mills 13 October 2006

Stunning opening to a layered poem of grief and, by the use of that final word 'found'; redemption. Flows like tears, and like them, provides a sense of relief and release which lifts it above the ordinary. Beautiful. J

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gone gone 08 October 2006

Tailor....a heart-touching and beautiful poem......of a child's pain and bewilderment...not wishing to accept the loss of a dear and special friend-in-fur....she waits for you across the Rainbow Bridge....to share never-ending clownful love with you....if that is what you believe.......... Love, D.

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John Lyday 09 April 2009

Made me well up a bit thinking of my lost pets. Good one.

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Ashley S 21 August 2007

A true heart-wrenching poem that anyone can relate to that has had and loved a pet. Your poem evokes many emotions in the reader. Very well written. Ashley

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Marci Made 08 March 2007

Broken down, so much sadness here, the tears streaming down ones face. It is beautiful and the title drew me in, , , , , for we all feel abit broken every now and then in one way or another, but the emotion in it held me to not only read it once, but then again to see what I might have missed.....this one is a treasure. mm :)

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Original Unknown Girl 02 February 2007

This poem has so many different connutations, it's great writing and sparing the details enough to make us wonder. I do agree with JH here, most heartbreaking. You do write fine pieces Tailor. Great work. HG: -) xx

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Not a member No 4 03 January 2007

Tailor, this is a sublimely heartbreaking piece of work. 'Dug her up again' opens and breaks hearts. Yeah, this is as much of a heartbreaker as I've read. Anywhere. You've captured a truth about how desperate our attachments can become and laid it out so rawly and purely that we feel it competely. jim

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